Biographies Archive

- Character Physical Description:
Name: Galaphile Gonshiro al'Tor
Gender: Male
Species: Human
Age: 17
Weight: 190 lbs
Height: 6'0"
Hair color: Black
Eye color: Blue

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- Brief Character History:

Galaphile was born on the core planet Correlia. His father Eventine Elesendil was political figure there, and had quite a bit of renown towards his figure. Born without his mother who died at his birth he was subjected to his fathers mercy. Even though his father took care of him and cared for him like any other father Eventine still held within his mind that Galaphile was to be blamed for his wifes death. Galaphile at an early age had force sensitivity and had sensed this emotion but did not understand it so he discarded this feeling as an figment of his imagination.

At the age of 17 he was visiting a famous tower with his friend and father. As they were enjoying themselves to the scenery of Correlia they encountered a man in black robes. They looked at him and thought him strange went on their way. But Galaphile could not move.

He knew something about this was wrong, a weird since told him that this man was extremely dangerous. This turned out to be true, no more than a couple of seconds later the man pounced on his father and killed him in cold blood with a famed lightsaber. His father Eventine clearly dead slumped to the floor, the man without hesitation killed his best friend as well. Sinking the saber into the young boys chest and kicking him off.

By the time that happened Galaphile was in staggering rage. He gave a accidental force push to the dark figure making him stumble. Galaphile ran at the man with only the thought of killing him. It was futile of course, as soon as he came within range the man hit him in the back of the head and he went unconscious.

He awoke on a bench at the tower, his head filled with confusing pain and terrible loathing. But strangely he was not loathing anyone. His anger should have been diverted to the man (possibly a Dark Jedi from the looks of his saber) who killed his father and best friend. But he didn't. The anger just lingered in his mind like a soul without a purpose.

The man appeared from a pillar in front of him and begun to stare at al'Tor. Galaphile immediately tried to attack, but no motion came to him. He could move but his body refused to attack the man. Some invisible force was refusing him that leisure. Then the man said, "I have sensed your power when I was at the tower. I sensed it even more when I slew that evil man who called himself your father. Do not think me a murderer, because I would do no such thing without great reason. I am a Sith Master of the Sith Order. Your father had been brutally killing our members without any meaning behind them. So I was sent to destroy him. I was sorry to kill the other boy as well but we couldn't have any witnesses."

Strangely Galaphile was drinking in every word he was saying even though it all sounded like a well planned out lie. "I kept you alive because I sensed the pain and power inside you. If you want to join the Sith Order and harness your power, for any situation like this you can protect yourself. Or become stronger. Whatever you see fit. But to see if your truly worthy, you have to find us yourself."

Then the Sith Master left without another word.

Just a few thoughts concerning your biography:

1. If I saw a Sith kill my father and best friend, I wouldn't readily follow him if he asked me to. In fact, I would probably have my character hold a great disdain toward the Dark Side, and seek to have him become a Jedi to protect others from the same injustice being sowed on them.

2. You don't have to display Force powers for a Force User to sense your character's presence in the Force.

3. Sith are Sith, not Dark Jedi. Dark Jedi are usually Rogue Jedi, or persons otherwise unaffiliated with either Jedi or Sith.

4. If your character recognizes a lightsaber, then have him recognize a lightsaber. No need to play the 'he thought it was one, but wasn't sure' angle; especially when there are a great deal of Jedi running about in the galaxy, so I'm sure most are aware of their form of weapon.

5. Humans look human. No need for brightly colored aqua eyes, right? What's wrong with blue? or green?

Just some points to consider. Up to you whether or not you decide to listen. :)

I see your point. Should I change it.

It would be a nice idea too ;)

Hell, I would've posted the same thing had Mr. Jas not do it

Ultimately it's up to you as to whether or not you change anything, as it is (in the end) your character.

I changed some of it. Left some parts for reasons.

A rival? Interesting...

A female rival....most intriguing.

The ablity to piss standing up is insignificant compared to the power of a pre-menstrual Sith.

Get a room, damnit.