he parents were killed by a empereal assasin at age 5 the people shund him so one day he finaly got mad and killed them all. but he was sorry for what he had done. one day he was captured by a empereal unit led by a unknown sith. he was givin mido clorend tests. and then was sentenced to death. but thanks to a fire he stole a tie enterceper and esaped he it wanted by the empire he also want jedi training beacals he is force sensitive and some day he may not live in fear and protect those who need it. he is a slow learner but he has the abillity to sence hiddin omotions good with a blaster needs a master.
Author: 5kyle5. Posted At: 08/25/2007 at 04:49 AM
i forgot to put affileation jedi padawon so far........
Author: Death_Stalks_Thee. Posted At: 08/25/2007 at 04:51 AM
One bit of advice spelling, grammar, punctuation and the like. A piece of writing can be ruined by bad grammar. I know. I had horrible grammar for a while, and paid for it.
Author: Irtar's Best Friend, Irtar. Posted At: 08/25/2007 at 04:52 AM
I mean this in the least offensive way possible:
Take English classes, or at least use a spell checker. When you can't spell 'Human', something is wrong. *nods*
Author: Death_Stalks_Thee. Posted At: 08/25/2007 at 04:54 AM
Use word if you have it, or fire fox has a built in spell checker although not all that reliable sometimes.
Author: 5kyle5. Posted At: 08/25/2007 at 04:59 AM
thanks i failed spelling. o and this is when my player is born 6 N.R.E. (9 ABY
Author: Gien Schi. Posted At: 08/25/2007 at 05:18 AM
You may have failed English, but I will make a suggestion myself:
1) The smallest effort in capitalization makes all the difference.
2) I'm sure everyone understands your "want" to be in this rpg, but perhaps you should take a look at some examples. Try "The Battlegrounds" forum and look there. If you are up to the challenge, go right on ahead. And I really hope I'm not sounding like a a**, but it would hurt our eyes to read a roleplay with bad grammar, spelling, ect.
On a final note, Good Luck. Hope to see you around.
Author: 5kyle5. Posted At: 08/25/2007 at 05:21 AM
"will do better." How do you get to traning?
Author: Death_Stalks_Thee. Posted At: 08/25/2007 at 05:33 AM
For a jedi, that might be a little hard, but I won't say anything bout that, as i'm not all that experienced. But here for some help try this site it has some good tutorials on some things you can use, Link .