Biographies Archive

Sorry if its a bit long! i'm new to TRF and i'm not sure about the whole RP forum thing. I've done RP before but only in chat rooms.

I was born into slavery on Pola Puisa an uncharted asteroid inhabited by Krozers, a foul breed only known to have been sighted in the far depths of wild space. As a slave we had to do several jobs on the asteroid with only 2 having age restrictions. I firs worked as a miner in the depths of the asteroid from when I was 1 year old to about 5, I then went to work in the processing plants just below the surface that grind up the Grillic that we mined into a fine powder known as Ploodes I worked here for about 3 years until I finally went to the surface, this was the first I’d seen it in my life and any space for that matter apart from in encouragement holograms played every 3 days at every 3pm. I worked as a loading technician for 2 years until I was sold when I was 10. I was sold to a slave trader in Tatooine.
I managed to make an escape with my mentor, Talik who had looked after me since I was a young boy as my mother died when I was 2. We escaped while we were being transported to Tatooine. We managed to get a small relay ship and fly to Naboo because we were the first ‘pickup’ on our new master’s route, he had to pick up several others and Naboo was the nearest planet my mentor knew was friendly.
As we arrived at Naboo we were greeted by Odii-Kaan a Jedi Knight who offered us a home and treated us for our wounds that we had induced whilst working long hours at Pola Puisa and during our escape. Talik and I lived on Naboo for 6 years. Odii-Caan educated me whilst I lived on Naboo he taught me all about the force and the universe and about all the different star systems, he also he also told the history of the Jedi Order to me in stories at first I could never believe that a now ruined culture could have been so wise, so powerful, so, honourable. It was only when I was 13 he started to tell me about the demise of the Jedi about the betrayal of several members of the Jedi Counsel that I realised that this story was true it was a history and that there was a high respect for Jedi across the Galaxy. While I was learning all about this and about the force, Odii-Caan taught me how to wield a lightsaber, and use the force. I could never become as such a skilled person as him and I could never become a Jedi, as I was too old to learn about the whole usage of the force. By the time he was teaching me these skills he had become a Jedi Master and was truly a great Jedi. After 7 years on Naboo sadly Talik died of the slavery his body could not take care of itself after all the work it had to do in the processing plants. His whole body gave up. He would have died much sooner I think if we hadn’t escaped, if we went to Tatooine we would have been traded and have to work just as hard and just as long.
When Talik died I decided, I didn’t want to stay in one place anymore, it was Talik that taught me to go to the best of my abilities, and that’s what I wanted to do. So I vowed to travel the galaxy in search for knowledge and power. Odii-Caan was going to be leaving Naboo soon aswell but in search for enlightenment he wanted to increase his relationship with the Force. So he wished for me to travel with him, for it would be really lonely travelling the galaxy alone, and I agreed I think it would be extremely good for me to have a Jedi by my side as a travelled the galaxy he would be able to help me increase my potential.
Now a year on a lot of things have changed, Sith risen from the abyss so all Jedi’s across the galaxy were called back to Naboo to hold a counsel and arrange a counter attack to the new Sith uprising. That easy a mere 2 months after we left we hardly got as far as Arbra before he had to leave me. So I was 14 and on my own travelling the galaxy, in search for a new friend, that would stay by my side forever…

Not bad but I'd suggest organizing it a little better. Use the others to help you organize.

Oh, and before you arrange a Council meeting you might want to speak to the Jedi about it. That and look at the time line to get an idea of where we're at and what we have.

i didnt read it because its organized like a shit stack.

edit: my advice would be to re-write it on Microsoft Word. Take your time, there is no rush; trf aint going anywhere.

oh and welcome to hell, i mean TRF.

Oooo. First-person bio.

Just sort out your structure and paragraphing and all shall be well. Take a look at some of the existing bios around here to get an idea of how it all works. =]

Thanks fr the input, i must admit english is not my best subject.

I would look at the timeline but it aint lettin' me in or in the ship database it says i dont have permission... so i dont know what to do. any suggestions?

i believe on this page there is a link to the timeline.

The ship database doesn't work. Its "under construction". Also know as, someone started it and then didn't have time to finish it so it isn't used.

...he started working in the mines at one year old?

Grev!

Suggestions for biography alterations will be given within the next few days.

anything can happen in starwars. ever heard of this guy named Anakin Skywalker? i hear he was powerful, yeah, really powerful.

Alright, Not bad. I like the 1st pearson, but he should be 4 or 5 when he got in the mines. I dunno about you, but when I can't remember crap about when I was one.

Don't listen to the people who say it's too long. I've wrote 2, 1 for my character, Kach Thorton, and one for Rebels character Ulrich Metheney (Rebel lives across the street from me and should become active as soon as he's ungrounded)

And a tip you couldn't know about, but on here The whole paragraph indent dosn't work, so alot of people put a space between paragraphs

Run every story you right through words spellcheck, it will make life alot easier.

Wilkommin zu den Rebell Splitterpartei!

Ditto to all of the above.

And fun fact: Memory doesn't start until age 3. So yeah, about the mines...

Yeah. Just... age him in some events a little, man.

i agree about the whole age thing and i dont know how i was working in the mines at 1!?!?!? anyway the memory thing starts at 3 thing the, i was going for where my mentor kinda told me about what happened to me as a young childand that kind of thing.

and thanks for the tip about the indents.

thanks for all your input and please put more tips about pretty much anything about TRF cos i admit i am a N008 so please any tips or advice are apreciated

Paragraph spacing. Now.

Or don't bother getting this approved by me.